asilve3
86 posts
Apr 05, 2010
7:18 PM
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I posted a simple recording of a song I wrote at the end of last summer. It was the beginnings of an album I have been hard at work producing. Alas, the project is still nowhere near complete. However, my many musical sketches have begun to take shape and are blossoming into full on musical compositions. Here is an updated and fully arranged version of the song I posted many months back.
I have not even shown this to my closest musical confidents. Instead, I am choosing to air it out here first. I eagerly await your feedback! I want to make this better so help me out.
here is a link if the embedded player does not work for you...http://www.4shared.com/file/257893606/694c2e09/signal_to_shine_bright.html
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kudzurunner
1310 posts
Apr 05, 2010
7:55 PM
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Wow! I've got lots of subjective impressions, so I'll just spill them in no particular order:
1) I wonder what Buddha thinks about this
2) really hip harmonies. Maybe a little too busy, harmonically: maybe needs a breakaway section in which everybody just grooves. This is more like smooth jazz chamber music rather than a smooth jazz radio-ready cut
3) The harp is too dry. More delay and/or reverb.
4) overblows!
5) A few "lumpy" places in the arrangement where time accumulates in nodes, pauses, then kicks back into gear. Not radio-ready. Drums drop out when you don't expect them to, then reappear
6) This feels like a not-quite-ready-for-Broadway version of a play that will, if all the adjustments were made, eventually make it to Broadway. But a good producer and good recording engineer would know what it needed.
7) I wish the harp player were, at least some of the time, hitting it slightly harder, really zinging it.
Good stuff!
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nacoran
1580 posts
Apr 05, 2010
8:11 PM
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I like it. I agree the harp could use a little delay or reverb, but I'm going to go out on a limb and disagree with Adam about the the way the drums drop out. I like it. The whole thing is really catchy. It wraps up a little too neatly though. Really the last two bars are the only part I don't like.
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earlounge
12 posts
Apr 05, 2010
8:36 PM
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This song is good man! I'd like to hear a full band playing it live... with real drums.
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boris_plotnikov
69 posts
Apr 06, 2010
3:02 AM
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Nice fusion stuff. There is no enough edge in harp sound. Try adding a bit more gain or more 1,5kHz or just reduce lower mid 400-800Hz to let harmonica sounds more bright.
Plastic computer drum sucks. Try some other VSTi to make drums sounds more natural or complete electronic. I get tired of tune as it almost has no dynamic. Less drum and bass velocity at the beginning, less notes on drums at the beginning. Change drums, do harmonica brighter, do wider dynamic and this already cool tune will go twice better.
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phogi
373 posts
Apr 06, 2010
3:14 AM
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Very cool. I like how you took the unusual sounds of the bends and said "I'm going to use this to my advantage!"
I do agree about the drums. Sound canned.
I'm not a smooth jazz fan, but sometimes it can grab ya.
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geordiebluesman
298 posts
Apr 06, 2010
3:18 AM
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If Howard Levi had dropped acid and jammed with Frank Zappa on his Hot Rats album it would have come out sounding like this (in my opinion anyway!), very Shagadellic baby!
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captainbliss
27 posts
Apr 06, 2010
3:20 AM
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Catchy,
I can bop around in my seat,
I can hum the tune.
This pleases my simple mind.
Maybe a funkier, cooler keyboard part / sound?
Thanks for posting!
xxx
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