The first vocal is too high in the mix and the harp is too low in the mix during the second vocal (but the vocal mixes better with the rest of the music there.) Another way to to get some separation in the music is to pan different parts left or right. The harping is nice but it doesn't really get a chance to establish a strong hook because it never gets a chance to be in front in the mix.
I think your playing is cool and on target for the genre.
Totally subjective, but I think a little 'verb or delay on your harp, just a touch to wet it up slightly, would sound nice for the recording.
Also, I think an extended harp solo where you tear it up and go off of those fill ideas would be cool, especially since you are playing a real instrument, you should really drive it home, it would create a nice break in the lyrics. Maybe even break it down to a real simple rhythm riff for several bars (for a butt shakin' dance interlude) before blasting a sassy solo!
I disagree with Nacoran. The harp belongs where it is, along or just on top of the baseline. "Shrouded in your love" (to me) is a theme suited to funk since the funk baseline has a way of winding around the lead while supporting it. The harp compliments that here.
I feel the harp should be slightly distorted and have some reverb. As it is, it's neat and sounds good, but the vocal has some effects (I think) and the plain sound is a little out of place. Plus, if you add a touch of reverb to both harp tracks, they will distort on their own at the 2:34 mark and make quite a statement.
yes i wrote the song my friend rapped on it for me. i sing the first part im still trying to work on my vocals. i agree with reverb and or distortion. i was limited to equipment. we did it in a closet.
I didn't notice that there were two different vocals. Both vocals are fine, except I feel your friend's "Yeahs" are weak and without feeling. Everything else about the vocals gets the job done just fine.
A good effort. The harp playing is where it should be - supporting the music. It is not the POINT of the music. In fact it is too hot in the mix 2/3 through the song. Let me be simon cowell for a moment though and be very blunt - the singing at the beginning of the song is bothersomely flat - it really bothered me. It came on pitch as you got into the song. I agree that the harp could use a little more "wetness" to lay in the background but still sound cool - some reverb at a minimum. ---------- /Greg
