Here is a new recording. I tried out the tips, I got as feedback a while a go.
I tried singing more convincing (learned the lyrics), I tried singing more melodic..In pitch, singin the changes more. And without worryin about accent to much.
Please tell me what you think. Is the singin over the top? Is it an improvement over my last recording (trouble no more).
its relaxed not so tightassed as before. but a bit too laid back. you need to put emphasis on some things. we talk very loud in public and it seems rude but were not being rude we just talk loud and emphasize ceratain words on certain beats.
like if were on a bus it doesnt matter if theres a window and the air is on, if we see someone we know outside we are going to talk without screaming as loud as we can to project through that glass and turn it into a speaker so the girl walking down the street can hear it.
i cant really explain this without doing it but heres some examples:
GET it cho (((DAMN))) self! HELL yeah.... So whatchu goan SSSAY ((((NEOW))))!
listen to some bobby darrin live. he did it perfectly. frank did it but it wasnt for real when he did. not to dis frank his muy rapido delivery has never been matched. if you feel it your should to bump one or two words up just do it but dont over do it. its like a rim shot only with the voice. yeah its more like drums than singing dont tell the drummer to rim shot just do it with the voice.
Well, if I went into bar and the band came on and it was you and your band and you sang and played like that--I'd just order another drink and sit back and enjoy myself--good job! ----------
But kinda what I think Billy Shines is saying, it sounds like you're singing with the lyrics sheet in front of you. Some parts sound maybe too matter-of-factly. Listen to Junior Wells version of this song a few times, notice the parts where his voice changes volume or he sounds more angry or the parts where he seems to have a maniacal laughter (dynamics). Food for thought.
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~Ryan
"I play the harmonica. The only way I can play is if I get my car going really fast, and stick it out the window." - Steven Wright
Pennsylvania - H.A.R.P. (Harmonica Association 'Round Philly)
@ MJ I only play the harp here (and the singin off course) I'ts just a backingtrack. I can strum on the guitar a little, bonfire level..
billy shines, I don't really understand your bus example. But I do understand, giving some words more accent. I should do that more yeah! I know what you mean by too much laidback.
Thanks oldwailer. I need a band! Working on it, work in progress. I'll meet a guitar player soon. It seem very promissing. He can play, blues that is..and doesnt have the urge to play endless solo with a shitload of effects.
Listing back..it's a little disapointing. When I record and listen, I think it sounds much better than after I get back. I don't know what that is.
yeah thats what i mean like reading a sheet. its feel man feel cant be taught. ive been to open mic my heart just not in it and split. unless im getting paid then i feel it lol. try singing in the dark its always helped me.
vocal tone and harp are both very nice...now make them not so nice...remember that cute girl that didn't do that...with you but, you later found out did with your firends...and it was good, real good, yep that good...now sing it, to her...she's listening :)
It comes down to the same ‘prob’ as my former recording. But that’s very good to know!
It’s hard putting in to words. I can really relate to the lyrics and I feel like total shit, that should work woudnt it? Why can’t I convey this in to my singing?
Some random thoughts: Junior Wells has been singing this song for years, besides it’s his song. He has that james brown soul going. With all those little vocal extras going as RyanMortos mentioned. For example what he does on the IV chord..that Wow – Yeah – Yeah yeahhh. That really spices up the song with regard to feel. When I record, I’m still tryin to learn the song, to make it my own. In the sense of timing, and enjoy doing so. Being in the moment if you know what I mean. And I worry about pitch all the time. (maybe that's what you hear smwoerner) In real life Im not that emotional expressive as well..maybe that explains something.
To end a little positive, it’s all a process and I think I did learn some stuff. Thanks for all comments/thoughts I really aprecciate it.
sounds very good. everyone has their own style. this might be yours. as long as it isnt forced, you're better off. thanks for your singing threads because it is helping me.
he based his singing on scottish bagpipes, sometimes he cried real tears as he sang. he couldnt read or write and kept no lyric books. he also made his own instruments.
K Hungus - I think it's definitely better, and does work the changes and melody lines better - though a lot of this song is on the root note of chords.
As others have said there could be more expression - the "oh no" on the IV in particular stands out as being a bit recited rather than felt. Also your phrasing is better than the first song but as this is a funk blues song it needs to be spot on to really make this song come alive.
