nacoran
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Oct 23, 2018
10:41 PM
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Monday I spent some time in the car, which is were I often write lyrics.
I got a song out of it. I've got a melody. Still needs a harp part though. I was trying something very sparse. Right now it's just a vocal track. Contacted my bass/guitar player. He likes it but hasn't gotten back with any ideas for instrumentation.
I met my own ghost while I was sitting at a campfire
He told me the minute, the hour, the day I was supposed to die
But he said he was getting tired, tired of waiting,
So he ripped my soul out right before my eyes
But my body, my body keeps on moving
Everyday I wish it wasn't so
Cause I am just a dead man, dead man walking
Another lost soul out here looking for my soul
But this once I thought I'd found my soulmate
She could tell that I was dead inside
She tried her very best, best to love me
But I had a coldness no love could abide
So no place left for me
I wander from bed to bed, town to town
I am just another soulless heathen
With not a soul left to tie me down
Here is the vocal track. I need to redo the first verse. It's got more syllables than it needs. Usually I'd fix that with syncopation and I can hear how I want to do the second line better, but for now it is what it is. (same for the bed to bed/town to town
So, how would people attack this musically? I could slow it down a bit. I was playing along on my B harp and it was hard to have slow solemn notes at this speed. I thought about resinging it lower too, but I'm really not sure what sort of music it needs. Gaps between the verses? Guitar? Bass? Lines that need fixing?
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