You sound very tentative and a little noodly. Stay in the groove. Focus more on getting a riff that works and making it sound like you mean it. Around 2:10 you sounded more like you were getting it, but you needed to project a bit more. It was partially the recording, but I think your volume was kind of inconsistent across the range. Some notes were audible but others just seemed to cut out. After the 2:10 mark I liked it.
